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Ubc Personal Profile Essay Questions

Hi, I'm writing my admission essay for UBC. Because I'm a Chinese students, there are might be some grammer mistakes in my essay. And I'm not sure if my essay is bind the topic of the question.

Please comment and edit my paragraphs. Thanks a lot !!!

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Tell us about an experience, in school or out, that taught you something about yourself and/or the world around you. (maximum 200 words)
When I was studying in Grade11, I began to learn admission information about universities. As I knew that international students need to meet the English language competency, an IELTS exam would be a good choice to indicate my ability. Last summer, I took my first IELTS exam but did not get a satisfying score. The IELTS marks revealed that my weakness were reading and listening. I was troubled by this result and steeled myself for another attempt, whereas I noticed that UBC admission officers recognized students who have completed three consecutive years in Canadian high school. I spent a whole summer vocation on studying reading and listening skills. Moreover, I read a lot English fictions and watch many English movies to get closer to local English life. My hard work paid off when I received my second IELTS exam result, that my scores on those two areas have significant improvements. Through this learning experience, I find that I am the person who has a strong will and an indomitable spirit, and I realized an old truth: "where there is will, there is way."

Be it inside or outside of the classroom, what have you done to challenge yourself intellectually? Describe an issue, topic or area of study that you have investigated or pursued. (maximum 200 words)

From early age, I love browsing through books and websites about computer knowledge, especially computer's working principles. Last year, I studied some basic knowledge of computer science in school and took a great interest in programming language. Then I decided to use my skills to program a little game as birthday gift to my father. I germinated to write a Tictactoe by using javascript because I usually played this game with my father on paper. Even though it was easy for me to copy down the programming code online, it almost spent all my leisure time from April to June to come out my own way to make the Tictactoe. During this process, I had to learn the complex knowledge of JS and combined it with other programming languages. Those efforts rewarded when I find I have got many knowledge of computer science and successfully made a perfect birthday gift.

Explain how you responded to a problem and/or an unfamiliar situation. What did you do, what was the outcome, and what did you learn from the experience? (maximum 200 words)

After living in China for more than 10 years, I decided to come to Canada to receive a new way of eduction. However, as an international student, I was unfamiliar with the new method of learning and the local culture. In the first semester, my Christian Ethics class had a big project that every student need to make a 40-minute oral presentation. I was so worried because I never had an experience that speaking in front of classmates for such a long time. Even though I felt depressed, I attempted to cheer up myself because this was a problem I must to come over. From this perspective, I consulted upperclassmen about tips and asked my teacher for more detailed help. Moreover, I spent a lot time on researching my topic and filtering the useful information. As a result, my prevention received great praises from my Ethics teacher and classmates. From this experience, I learned to see things in a positive perspective. Whenever I confront a problem, I will think it with a confident attitude and come over it in a courageous way.

Tell us more about one of the activities you listed above by explaining what your goals were, the role you played, and what you learned in the process. (maximum 200 words)

In September, I volunteered in a rummage sale and worked with a group of kindhearted people who were from various industries in our society. I participated it because volunteer service was a good opportunity to learn life skills and assimilate into the local culture. In this rummage sale, my job was to collect money for the art works and sell costumers products, and at the end I helped to sort items. Since I was not good at promoting sales, this experience helped me gain confidence to deal with people and develop the skills in business knowledge. Moreover, sorting stuff taught me an important lesson that overall planning and proper arrangement are the key to saving time but work efficiently. This volunteer service also helped me to understand my social responsibility that individuals could have contribution to the whole society.

Additional information: Applicants may wish to explain why they want to study their particular program at UBC (maximum 100 words.)
In Bachelor of Art, my most interested major is Computer Science. Since childhood, I took interests in things computers can do. Moreover, today's world is a high-tech world, computers are helpful and have brought great changes in our daily life. Thus, computing and its related subjects are the most attractive topics for me.

My second choice is Urban Forestry. Nowadays, environmental problems have become the burning issue in our society, especially for the lack of urban green spaces. It is very important that young people take part in the environmental activism and learn the particular knowledge.

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Hi Nancy, I know that you are new to the forum so you probably aren't that familiar with the rules here yet. We have a one essay per thread ruling and the admin deletes all successive essays located in a single thread. So, in an effort to help you, I will give you advice on the topmost essay in your thread. That is considered the first essay. You need to start new and separate threads for your other essays before we can help you with those.

Rather than telling the reviewer that you began to research studying abroad opportunities in Grade 11, you should instead, show him how you prepared for your first IELTS test. That is so that when he finds out that you failed 2 portions of the test, the background or reasons that you failed in those portions will be clear to him. That information is more important than why you decided to take the test. What is important, is that you took the test, you failed, and then you prepared again and this time, you succeeded in your task. So the rest of the essay has a good presentation for the last part of your essay. You just need to revise the start so that it will be more interesting and informative to read.

In order to assess your preparedness for university, UBC will evaluate you on a broad range of criteria including your academic achievements and personal experiences. That’s where the Personal Profile section of UBC’s online application comes in.

Knowing more about you through your Personal Profile helps UBC determine whether you will flourish here – not just because of your grades, but also because of the experiences and ambition you bring with you.

The Personal Profile is required of all high school students applying to all UBC degrees on the Vancouver and Okanagan campuses. The Personal Profile is also required of all transfer applicants into the Bachelor of Commerce and Kinesiology degrees on the Vancouver campus, and the Nursing degree on the Okanagan campus.

Check out the Personal Profile video for tips and advice.

If you cannot play the Personal Profile video, try watching it here.

Tell us about yourself

The Personal Profile gives you the opportunity to tell UBC about the things that are important to you, your significant achievements, what you’ve learned from your experiences, and the challenges that you’ve overcome.

This information – along with your academic achievements – will be used to determine your admissibility to UBC and your eligibility for entrance scholarships and awards.

There is no separate application for entrance scholarships and awards so the Personal Profile is the only opportunity for you to tell UBC about yourself.

Preparing for the Personal Profile

  • Because each of the questions in the Personal Profile requires short essay answers (anywhere from 50 to 200 words), you’ll want to brainstorm some ideas before you start your online application.
  • Don’t just provide a list of accomplishments without taking the time to reflect on what you have learned from them, and what you want to continue learning at UBC.
  • When writing your responses, be specific. Use details to substantiate and elaborate on your answers.
  • Focus on what you want to say and be true to who you are. Don’t provide the answers you think UBC wants to hear. We are interested in your unique voice.

Questions to ask yourself before you begin writing

The following questions can help you reflect on your experiences and accomplishments, and may help you shape your Personal Profile answers.

  • What are the qualities you think make for a successful university student? How have you demonstrated such qualities in the past?
  • Think about your first-choice UBC degree. What kinds of activities, accomplishments, and insights – learned in or outside of the classroom – do you think would be relevant to this degree?
  • Think about your accomplishments and activities. What have you learned from these experiences? When have you taken on a leadership role? What do you excel in at school or outside of school? What do you enjoy learning in school? Or what do you enjoy doing outside of school that has influenced what you want to learn?
  • Think about the role others have played in your accomplishments and experiences.
  • Think about how your favourite teacher would describe you. Why would your teacher describe you this way? Be specific. Try to incorporate this information into your responses.
  • Think about two or three adjectives that best describe you. For each, provide some evidence of why they describe. Be specific. Try to incorporate this information into your responses.
  • Think about the challenges that you have had to overcome in your life. What have those experiences taught you about yourself and about your community?

How UBC evaluates your Personal Profile

UBC looks at each prospective student as a whole person: a combination of talents, interests, and passions. Whatever your background, experiences, and skills, the Personal Profile is your chance to help us learn more about you.

UBC’s trained readers will read and evaluate your Personal Profile and compare it with the profiles written by other UBC applicants. Your Personal Profile assessment will be used together with your academic profile assessment to determine your UBC admission decision.

We are not looking for a particular experience, and there are no right or wrong answers. We encourage you to focus less on telling us what you think we to want hear and instead concentrate on what you want to say and how you want to say it.

Your profile will be assessed against four criteria:

  1. Engagement and Accomplishment

How do you pursue your interests and manage your responsibilities? What do you do with your time when you are not in class? What would you (or others in your community) consider your most significant contributions and accomplishments? Whether it’s winning an international award or taking care of a younger sibling, any experience can teach you something about yourself and/or the world around you. We want to know what you have been doing and what have you have learned from your experiences. Make sure to give specific examples.

  1. Leadership

Have you undertaken responsibilities and activities that have benefitted those around you and/or contributed to your community in a meaningful way? If so, what have you learned about yourself and others in the process? Leadership can come in many forms. Any act of responsibility and/or initiative that serves others is a form of leadership. Leadership can be demonstrated in a formal role, within a group (i.e. being president of a club or captain of a team), or in an informal role, as an individual (i.e. taking it upon yourself to help in your community). And remember – it’s not just about being in a leadership role, it’s about what leadership has taught you.

  1. Substance

Have you spent sufficient time reflecting upon what you want to say? Have you answered the questions in a detailed and meaningful way? Is the content of your Personal Profile superficial or clichéd, or are you presenting interesting, well thought-out, and relevant ideas? Remember that the trained UBC readers will be reviewing and comparing thousands of Personal Profiles. The best way to stand out is by making sure you have something meaningful and insightful to say.

  1. Voice

Communication is important. How do you communicate your ideas? Regardless of what you choose to write about, ask yourself the following: Have I written a Personal Profile that is genuine and unique to who I am? Does my profile authentically reflect my own words? Will my voice stand out in a meaningful way, or will my profile read like many others?

Please note that the following degrees consider additional criteria, materials, and/or supplemental applications:

Okanagan campus

Vancouver campus

 

 

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